麻烦帮忙批一下英文作文,大一水平
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发布时间：2022-04-24 16:30
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热心网友
时间：2023-10-22 18:21
Nowadays, college students are crazing about the latest fashion. It is a fact on everyone's lips. Some people hold the opinion that it is understandable because good looking can reflect one’s sprit, if one wearing vivid color and neat, he or she may feel positive and it could also making others good mood.
But on the contrary, some people think that they shouldn't spend too much time on chasing fashion. If a student uses too much time on following fashion, he or she must have less time on his or her studying. However, what a college student really has to do is putting studying in the first place.
From what I mentioned above, college students need not spend too much time on catching up with the latest vogue. As a student, it is enough for him or her to wear ordinary clothes. It's meaningless to compete with others in clothing. What college students should do is to try their best in studying.
hold the point不是不对，但是感觉上涌opinion更加好一些。
pioneer有种*性的前驱的感觉，所以用在这个地方也不太合适。
put studying on the top of...这个地方太累赘了，还有and后面跟前半句讲的是一个意思，根本没有必要。
逗号太多， 很多地方应该用句号，逗号太多会显得整篇文章逻辑不清晰。
结构上很有缺陷，写成三段式比较好。第一段可以开头跟陈述一条原因，第二条陈述相反原因，最后一段总结，这样子文章会更加清晰。
如果是15分标准的话，大概有9—11分的样子……
热心网友
时间：2023-10-22 18:21
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热心网友
时间：2023-10-22 18:22
Today, college students Pursuit final fashion this is a question of fact, everyone who wants to have lips.Some point is understandable, because it can reflect the look and feel beautiful on the Treasure of these universities to develop sprit.But, some people The idea, they should not take fashion too much time spenf what college students should do is put their agendaand top down learning into all of their efforts to learn Chinese.
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